Your video made me think, which, I believe, is what you wanted. It also made me feel, a little less, but at the end, there was a moment, I promise, where I felt something, not sure what it was…maybe disconnect…maybe a feeling that I am only my patterns…or maybe a feeling that even the ones I love will use me in some form….So yes, for me, your video was loaded….which is a strength that can easily venture into disarray… …
I appreciated your thought process in this video. I can tell you spent time calculating the plot, organizing people, gathering equipment, editing, watching and so on…it seems though, that there was so much organized, that when it felt unorganized, it was really distracting….as in some of your lighting, color correction, voice over….when the loose ends showed up, they were noticeable as the rest of the video was “put together”…..but this is something that can be remedied by more time, less complications, and well….simplifying. now that you are working with big ideas, see if you can simplify the delivery of them…to save yourself more work, and, I suppose, say your point in a shorter sentence….
“If I had more time, I’d have written you a shorter letter” – Mark Twain
As it takes more time to really focus on what you want to say and how to say it, as opposed to babbling on and on….i think in this vein art/film/music/sound/etc is similar. Not that your video should have been shorter, that’s not it at all, its that I wanted to receive your message more clearly…with less distraction. Can you find a way to turn your attention to detail onto the visuals themselves? Can you balance the energy you spend on your thought process with making a beautiful video? Beautifully surreal, Intelligently grotesque? You’re almost there.
By the way, what is your message? You said in class that your main character was basically “soulless”….but I think your videos are more complicated than that, which is good. In your videos there is an internal process of an individual juxtaposed with external social architecture and the struggle that ensues. Are you conflicted? If you are, great! Most great artists are!!!! Maybe recognizing those conflictions would be a step for you as a creative person…for me, your ideas border on the existential, mythological, and social ways of being in the world. Read Jung, Foucault, and maybe even some Helen Keller. Do you know Butoh? Kazuo Ono is somehow related to what you are doing…a conflict between physical/internal/mystical/societal…. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZUjhQLB0hXY&feature=related
Anyhoo, your film was one of the densest, in terms of heady ideas, in the class thus far. Which, I appreciate. Thank you for trying to make me learn something and make me feel something at the same time…most videos don’t. Whatever you do, don’t stop making art, you have a keen eye and a keener mind.













